Well, here’s a short story I wrote a few weeks ago. I’m not sure what I think about it… Any kind of criticism, advice, or suggestions would be greatly appreciated. 
‘Will You Weep’
by Colleen Porter
“Will you weep for me?”
It had seemed a simple enough question at the time, as though Gedric hadn’t meant anything by it. At first I thought he was joking. I looked up at him, about to laugh, when I saw that he was serious. Much too serious. It made me uncomfortable; he would be back, they would all be back. This was just a small skirmish, not a full-fledged battle. The odds were even, and our men would be attacking using darkness and surprise as their advantage. No one would die. And besides, even if he were going to die, why would he care whether or not I wept for him? More likely he’d be making this little speech to Clarine, or Lirette, or one of the other village girls. Certainly not to me.
“Sure,” I said uneasily, trying to sound like I wasn’t paying attention. “But you’re not going to-”
“Mirelle, please. Will you weep?”
My breath stuck in my throat. He must know something they weren’t telling the rest of the villagers. His eyes, his dark, deep eyes, searched mine. He really meant it. As horrible as it seems to me now, I didn’t really care that maybe this was more serious than we’d thought, maybe he’d die. Maybe they’d all die. What had so captured my thoughts was what he meant by that simple question. It was more than if I was afraid for him. He wanted to know if… if I loved him. How had I missed this?
“Yes,” I said, finally able to breath again. He looked relieved and I felt guilty. Would I really be able to weep for him? I didn’t think I had any tears left by now. Maybe I did, but I didn’t want to find out.
A trumpet sounded from the gate. The men were preparing to leave.
“I have to go,” Gedric said.
“I know,” I answered. He turned away from me, retrieving his sword, shield, and helmet from the parapet, then strode quickly back along the wall toward the front gate. I turned to face the sunset, leaning against the outer parapet. The rough stone was warm against my skin, heated after hours of sun beating down upon it. In a few minutes I could see them riding away from the village, their banners bleached of color by comparison to the glorious red blotch on the horizon. The farther away they got, the less I cared what happened to him. I had lied to him. He had probably lied to me as well, about their not surviving this little raid. Probably just a tactic warriors used to woo young women. I didn’t care about any of them. Yet I didn’t leave the wall that night. The sentries left me alone, and I knew no one back home would miss me. It got cold, what warmth that was left in the stone wall quickly ebbing away. It was dark also, for there was no moon that night, and clouds blocked most of the starts. Still, I never moved. I didn’t care about him. It felt like eternity had collected itself into that night like dew on a blade of grass, so that the hours were stretched to the breaking point. But when the sun began to rise behind me it felt like it had only just set a few moments ago. The village began to come to life below, and the sun warmed my frozen back. A few more hours passed. I began to wonder where they were. Just curious. The sun was overhead now, burning and brilliant. The sky was clear.
They were back. A cry went up in the village. The sentries raised the flags. I could see the small cloud of dust their horses’ hooves were stirring up. No banners. Before I knew it I was flying out the gate, beyond the familiar safety of the wall. I cut through the tall grass so as to take a more direct route to them. I came up to them and stopped, finally able to turn my focus away from my feet.
They looked horrible. And there were so few that had returned! Most of the horses bore the seriously wounded, who were slumped in the saddles in awkward positions. My heart continued to beat as fast as when I was hurtling through the grass.
“Gedric?” I asked the company commander. He gestured with his head which was wrapped in bloodied bandages. I turned around, searching the faces of the men who were plodding along past me on their huge, weary horses. I saw Camden, one of Gedric’s close friends, and Gedric’s horse being led along beside him. I looked up at him pleadingly. He stopped the horses in the middle of the road.
“He fought well. Survived the battle but…” he said quietly, staring blankly at the limp frame covered in a cloak, slumped across the back of Gedric’s horse. “He was badly hurt.”
I clenched my teeth to keep from gasping. Camden sighed sadly, looking away from me. He spurred his horse on again, muttering softly, “It wasn’t supposed to happen like this.”
I was standing in the middle of the road as the rest of the returning warriors rode slowly by. I stumbled to the side of the road, falling into the tall grass. It hid me from the rest of the world, the thin blades prickling my face.
I hadn’t lied to him after all. I wept.
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